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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Fri Jun 11, 2010 7:36 am

Well, meh is the reader, so meh gets to decide whether any poem was great to read or not, and this one definitely was... Smile

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jun 24, 2010 1:57 pm

Here are my most recently written:

In Time

She is there,
I am here,
One day I hope
To fly to her
Like a moth
To a flame.
Some say that
I should stay,
That I'm being
Rash.
I say they're wrong,
That they know
Nothing,
Nothing at all...

Give me time,
Time to save,
Time to prepare.
And then
I shall come.
One day
I will be there
For you,
Forever.
One day
I will be able
to protect you,
To truly love you.
One day...
I swear...



Opposites

It flows through me,
Life.
It surrounds me,
Death.
The Yin and Yang,
Suffering and Happiness.
Hand in hand,
Love and Hate.

I feel it all,
Coarse through my veins.
And now they build,
Powering my soul.


Them

While I'm happy,
They make me hate.
While I'm in pain,
They kick me down.
While I'm at my end,
They still push me.
While I reach for freedom,
They bind me tighter.
While I love,
They try to make me doubt.
While I cry,
They make it worse.
While I'm dying,
They make me suffer...

I'm at my end,
I shall snap.
They will know fear,
They will pay.
Let them drown in their own blood,
Burn by my anger,
Die from my hatred.
Let revenge flow free,
Let it consume me...


My Love for Her

The sun shines apart,
Bright and warm,
Inside my heart.
The moon is full,
As is my heart
And my soul.
Nature is bringing flowers
That are growing
Like my love for her...

The thought of her
Brings a smile
To my lips, for sure.
She's on my mind all day.
'I love you.'
Is all I can say.
She will always be
My one and only,
The only girl I see.
I can only believe
That she and I
Are meant to be.
She saved me
From jumping, falling,
And now I'm free.
My love for her
Will never end...
Of that I'm sure.


Split Seven Ways

Hate
Can rule me.
Love
Can power me.
Misery
Can fool me.
Pride
Can challenge me.
Happiness
Can find me.
Sadness
Can destroy me.
Anger
Can grow in me.

Hate
Is dead.
Love
Has won.
Misery
Is fading.
Pride
Stays strong.
Happiness
Stays back.
Sadness
Will disperse.
Anger
Can never leave.


Untitled

They say it can't last,
That it will fade.
They claim we'll cheat,
that we'll fall apart.
They fret that the distance,
that it's too great.
They think we're nuts,
That we're freaks.
They caution to us
That we should wait.
They are wrong.
We will last forever.
We will stay united.
We will challenge the hardships,
And win.
We will prove our sanity,
Justify our plans,
Sucumb to none.
for I lov eher,
And she loves me;
We will love happily,
In perfect harmony.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jun 24, 2010 2:41 pm

Okay.... so, what to say here.... well, tbh, I am speechless... Other ones are really good, some just made me me want to just.. *sighs*
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jun 24, 2010 5:49 pm

O.o

I don't remember what I was feeling when I wrote most of them, but....*shrugs* Most of them aren't close to being good in my mind, but they're my releases, I suppose...

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jun 24, 2010 5:57 pm

Well, I know you so, nothing to worry about. And thats better that you can write poems as a form of 'release' then because, that's what I do too so.....
;) ANyway, keep writing... *smiles*
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jun 24, 2010 6:04 pm

*grins*

Yeah yeah, I'll keep it going. I'm not going to write much poetry for a bit though, 'cause I'm working on Chapter 3 for my book right now...almost done...like 2/3 way done...

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Fri Jun 25, 2010 2:42 am

Rain Stinks wrote:

In Time

She is there,
I am here,
One day I hope
To fly to her
Like a moth
To a flame.
Some say that
I should stay,
That I'm being
Rash.
I say they're wrong,
That they know
Nothing,
Nothing at all...

Give me time,
Time to save,
Time to prepare.
And then
I shall come.
One day
I will be there
For you,
Forever.
One day
I will be able
to protect you,
To truly love you.
One day...
I swear...
*grins* Yup, pure feelings in this one. Very effective, straight forward and great to read.

Rain Stinks wrote:

Opposites

It flows through me,
Life.
It surrounds me,
Death.
The Yin and Yang,
Suffering and Happiness.
Hand in hand,
Love and Hate.

I feel it all,
Coarse through my veins.
And now they build,
Powering my soul.
Hmm, interesting theme here. Again very straightforwardly written, but not in the least ineffective. The thought have been described clearly and the whole poem was to the point.

Rain Stinks wrote:

Them

While I'm happy,
They make me hate.
While I'm in pain,
They kick me down.
While I'm at my end,
They still push me.
While I reach for freedom,
They bind me tighter.
While I love,
They try to make me doubt.
While I cry,
They make it worse.
While I'm dying,
They make me suffer...

I'm at my end,
I shall snap.
They will know fear,
They will pay.
Let them drown in their own blood,
Burn by my anger,
Die from my hatred.
Let revenge flow free,
Let it consume me...
Scary. You have a very brilliant way of expressing what you are feeling. Nicely written this one. The repetitions of 'they' worked very well.

Rain Stinks wrote:

My Love for Her

The sun shines apart,
Bright and warm,
Inside my heart.
The moon is full,
As is my heart
And my soul.
Nature is bringing flowers
That are growing
Like my love for her...

The thought of her
Brings a smile
To my lips, for sure.
She's on my mind all day.
'I love you.'
Is all I can say.
She will always be
My one and only,
The only girl I see.
I can only believe
That she and I
Are meant to be.
She saved me
From jumping, falling,
And now I'm free.
My love for her
Will never end...
Of that I'm sure.
Oho! I'm very sure this poem would have made a certain person go Embarassed The difference between this one and your first poem in this post is startlingly clear. Though the nature of both is same, the first one is direct, while this one is more expressive. The metaphors have been used well, the descriptions have been made well, and the result is that this would be one of you best works for me.

Rain Stinks wrote:

Split Seven Ways

Hate
Can rule me.
Love
Can power me.
Misery
Can fool me.
Pride
Can challenge me.
Happiness
Can find me.
Sadness
Can destroy me.
Anger
Can grow in me.

Hate
Is dead.
Love
Has won.
Misery
Is fading.
Pride
Stays strong.
Happiness
Stays back.
Sadness
Will disperse.
Anger
Can never leave.
Fantastic Rain! Very well style you have used to write this one. Your poems remind me of how BE used to write. Short ones, but full of feeling. Always great to read.

Rain Stinks wrote:

Untitled

They say it can't last,
That it will fade.
They claim we'll cheat,
that we'll fall apart.
They fret that the distance,
that it's too great.
They think we're nuts,
That we're freaks.
They caution to us
That we should wait.
They are wrong.
We will last forever.
We will stay united.
We will challenge the hardships,
And win.
We will prove our sanity,
Justify our plans,
Sucumb to none.
for I lov eher,
And she loves me;
We will love happily,
In perfect harmony.

This seemed a sequel to the earlier one titled 'Them'. Used similar style and forceful repetitions of 'they'. The topic was different in this one though.

Well, lot of good ones you gave me to read right now. Enjoyed myself. Hope you get another stack out soon... Smile

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Fri Jun 25, 2010 8:32 am

@in time- This was a good poem and I can see that there is nothing that peopel can say to waiver your decision.

@opposites- That one is kinda short but yet it gives me a pigture of how one can not be without the other.

@Them- If them is who I think it is supposed to be then I say leave Them.

@My love for her- This one is also well written. I can see that you do truley love her and would do anythign you could for her from this poem.

@split seven wars- This one shows a great deal of feeling in it. It may be short but the feelign behin dit is what makes this one a great poem.

@untitled- I too just like Zach think that this could be a sequal to Them. It is well written and I can sense that you hate someone or multiple people who are trying to hurt you.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Mon Jun 28, 2010 7:25 pm

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@in time- This was a good poem and I can see that there is nothing that peopel can say to waiver your decision.
Sadly, that's where I'm at at this point.
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@opposites- That one is kinda short but yet it gives me a pigture of how one can not be without the other.
That's what I was hoping for.
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@Them- If them is who I think it is supposed to be then I say leave Them.
I can't yet.
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@My love for her- This one is also well written. I can see that you do truley love her and would do anythign you could for her from this poem.
Yeah well...that's how I fell, you know? Had to express it one way.
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@split seven wars- This one shows a great deal of feeling in it. It may be short but the feelign behin dit is what makes this one a great poem.
This one actually took me the longest to write. I had trouble getting it all out just right.
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@untitled- I too just like Zach think that this could be a sequal to Them. It is well written and I can sense that you hate someone or multiple people who are trying to hurt you.
Actually, it was Ar. Not Zach. *grins*
Anyways, that one isn't really for hate per se, but it is strong dislike. I don't like some of the things that these certain people, for yes it is multiple people, are trying to say and do. Let me put it bluntly:
They are, more or less, trying to stand between me and Janelle. They won't/can't succeed, but they are trying. They try to make arguments that would make me want to break up with her, they try to make me change my mind, and things like that. They know nothing, they speak nothing, they will feel nothing in their lives. One day I will not be sad to see the back of them. Of course, there is always the possibility that I'll have to get into a fight with them. For their sake, it had better be verbal only. I'm back in shape more or less, I'm not holding anything back anymore. Not in my running, not in my chores, not in my life. I refuse to back down anymore.

Mmm...I just realized how much I've changed this past month-2 months, and how much better it seems in the reality. I mean, I'm still me...but I'm more me than I was before...

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Jul 06, 2010 5:13 am

Mmm....

These were written while I was uber-pissed, like really (Censored Comment) pissed. I nearly lost it. So....*shrugs* Whatever.

Flux
Empty...
Numb...
How can it be?
Struggling for breath
With lungs filled
Full of Death,
Despair, Anger, Fear...
But somehow, now,
Everything is clear.
Could it be true?
Was nihilism really
What I knew>
To the thought I shrink
That that was
Really how I think.
Promises have been shed
And now my mind,
Soul, and body have bled.
My very self's shell
Is stuck in flux,
A flux that is hell...

Darkness Ascending
The night sky shines
With millions of lights
And cares not.
For Life is Life
Just as Death is Death.
But Existance,
Ah, Existance is
Exactly what we make it.
Good or bad, fun or boring,
Happy or sad, it all is only
What you call for.
Nothing can be known,
Only guessed;
And communication is not
Actually there.
Values shift and change
And mean squat;
Loyalties fail and fall
With the gust of winds.
What are we,
If nothing but
Creatures of Ignorance,
Set upon Destruction?

Darkness
Some would call it evil;
Others, pessimistic;
Still more, nihilistic.
But what they don't know
Is that it all resides
In each of us.
Some carry it more,
While others less,
But it has, is, and will
Always pulse through our veins.
It weakens most,
But we few use it.
We gain power;
Power that happens to
Thunder through us,
Obliterating thought,
Pain, fear, and
All the weaknesses...
For that is
Darkness...

The Method of Work
What is work?
Is it doing things?
Doing them for pay?
Is it manipulating energy?
Work is all,
From hard labor
To exercise,
to wearing on.
It should not be
Shunned,
Resisted,
Rebelled,
Nor repelled.
For Work is needed,
Is necessary,
For Life to survive.
Without Work,
Is there really
Such a thing as
Life?

YOU SHOULD NOTE THE DEFFINITION OF NIHILISM (for it occurs in the first 3 of the above added poems):
"Nihilism is the belief that all values are baseless and that nothing can be known or communicated. It is often associated with extreme pessimism and a radical skepticism that condemns existence. A true nihilist would believe in nothing, have no loyalties, and no purpose other than, perhaps, an impulse to destroy."

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Jul 06, 2010 5:23 am

Umm.... I actually liked all of them. The feelings were all there. The themes were greatt too but, you actually did release it all... Glad there's such a word as 'nihilism' to describe what you felt.. Great poems! And I found the last one, about the job, funny.. XD

EDIT: Re-read it and god, you sure can be so violent, no? *sighs*
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Jan 18, 2011 12:57 pm

Update:

[Untitled]

Little by little,
Bit by bit,
Life comes
And picks the hits.

A blow to the front,
A blow to the back,
A blow that
Puts you in a sack.

Don't stand in its way
Nor really stand nearby
Or else you'll find
Life saying good-bye.

Pick up the slack,
There's no going back.



[untitled]

A fear that grabs your guts,
Fear for your butt.
Never again.



Emotions

Full of raw emotion,
Full of fear.
Full of worry,
Over what I hold dear.

Stuck in the past,
It sure isn't a blast.
Now I'll move on,
So she won't be gone.

I don't want to hurt her,
Not anymore,
Not that I ever did,
On purpose, before.

I hope to be forgiven,
for all to be forgotten.
But that's not really
Possible, you see.

(Now get ready,
For the rhymes end here.
Now get ready,
The tough is near.)

A god must be cruel,
to ruin all when
I become happy.
To kill all that
don't deserve it.
A god could have
made me what I am.
If so, screw you.

I have so many problems,
it's really annoying.
But I can handle it,
that is if I have her.

Sometimes I wonder
what I'd do
without her.

Then I think,
If she left...

(Here we go,
more rhymes for you.)

Words mean nothing,
I'm on another string.
I have to deal with
Everything I bring.

Just as I always do,
I've ruined it all.
Just as I always do,
I've started to fall.

I want to sit and cry,
but the tears don't come.
We'll see in time,
But I shan't hum.

Slap me to reality,
That's what's been done.
Now I'm in sorrow,
Seeing what I've done.

Hate me,
Go ahead.
It makes little difference,
Even if you're a friend.

Love....
What can I say?

~ Shane, "Rain Stinks"

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Jan 18, 2011 1:02 pm

That is very deep shane, and it is very good. Even when you didnt rythm, there was still a good flow, and shape to it. Not the word I was looking for but I couldnt think of the right word to use.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Jan 18, 2011 1:03 pm

FIrst poem: I actually think it's a good poem. It shows you're trying not to let some things put you down.

Second poem: LOL! It made me laugh. Idk tbh. xD

Last Poem: One word: I LOVE it. Well-done! :]
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Jan 18, 2011 1:06 pm

Err...
Thanks guys.

The second one is just some random thing I put down recently.

The other ones came from within.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Jan 18, 2011 5:35 pm

*laughs* That second one was great.

The other two were very nice as well. The first was very to the point. Just saying exactly what you think, which I liked. Though perhaps the rhyming restricted you a little. As for the third, the title I suppose has summed it up pretty good. There's nothing I have to add on that one. I assume it was much appreciated though.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Wed Jan 19, 2011 10:13 am

Well, thanks Soph. (glad to see you post, btw. I've missed seeing you around.)

That second one really was one of my feeble stabs at humor.

As for rhyming restricting me...well, yeah. It does. But it helps me at the same time, to organize it and to help make it flow.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 10:21 am

Mmm...This is just a quick one, but I really like it. So I'll share it here.

Birthday

I came flying high,
Soaring through the sky,
Thinking hard,
To realize.

My head stayed held high,
I shall never stray by,
This is my life,
And now it's mine.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 10:22 am

Like I said, awesomerz dear boy!!! Love it! I love you
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 1:57 pm

Thanks. ^_^ Glad to hear you like it.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:00 pm

Welcome. You should update your thread often. lol
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:05 pm

Yeah, I probably should. Maybe I'll put up anything I create in Fleaman's LPtPW threads on FL and here.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:06 pm

You should and you should post your drawings too.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:08 pm

If I can, I will.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Mar 24, 2011 6:29 pm

Short sweet and to the point. Great poem.
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