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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Thu Aug 12, 2010 8:15 pm

The Spirit of Fire


Whats two will become one as one becomes whole
whats lacked in blood binds body and soul
The spirit of fire, now divided in two,
now divided by time and placed in those who
complete the balance of strength and harmony
and in the face of the great beasts melody
bring peace to land and sea
return the world to as it was
and lifts the world from evils claws

once done warring souls will be put to rest
humanity will pass the great ones test
and in the hands of the spirit of fire
shall forever be slaked all doom desire

This is a prophecy I wrote for a story I'm working on
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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Mon Aug 16, 2010 7:22 am

That is good. Can I ask what story?
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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Sat Sep 18, 2010 10:28 pm

Eh you could, answer would be pending though... ^_^

My magic

Baby, your always in my mind,
my hearts forever in a bind
my whole lifes stuck in rewind
as I can't stop thinkng of you

Because girl your my magic
I'm nothing without you
my worlds color are nothing but blue
I can't stop thinking what am I to do
I just can't shake the habit
because baby your my magic

You hold my sun in the sky
light the stars in the night
you make everything right
if not you then I don't know who

Because girl your my magic
the loveliest I ever knew
you make the stars always shine
oh girl theres no greater crime
my hearts turning on a dime
just to think about you
because baby your my magic...


Finally an inspiration...and a strange one at that...
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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Thu Oct 07, 2010 10:51 am

Gardecario wrote:
The Spirit of Fire
Whats two will become one as one becomes whole
whats lacked in blood binds body and soul
The spirit of fire, now divided in two,
now divided by time and placed in those who
complete the balance of strength and harmony
and in the face of the great beasts melody
bring peace to land and sea
return the world to as it was
and lifts the world from evils claws

once done warring souls will be put to rest
humanity will pass the great ones test
and in the hands of the spirit of fire
shall forever be slaked all doom desire

This is a prophecy I wrote for a story I'm working on
Wow thats a new one! An attempt at a prophecy? Very well done, I must say. Right from the start it had the... archaic feel to it that all prophecies have. Though I could suggest you to make it even more vague than it is right now, you know, make it sound even more bonkers, and not connected to anything. That way, when the prophecy actually comes to be in your fic, the climax will be a bit more I think. Great job though, never read someone working on a prophecy before. Smile

Gardecario wrote:
Eh you could, answer would be pending though... ^_^

My magic

Baby, your always in my mind,
my hearts forever in a bind
my whole lifes stuck in rewind
as I can't stop thinkng of you

Because girl your my magic
I'm nothing without you
my worlds color are nothing but blue
I can't stop thinking what am I to do
I just can't shake the habit
because baby your my magic

You hold my sun in the sky
light the stars in the night
you make everything right
if not you then I don't know who

Because girl your my magic
the loveliest I ever knew
you make the stars always shine
oh girl theres no greater crime
my hearts turning on a dime
just to think about you
because baby your my magic...
Another good one. It sounds a bit more as if it were a song, than a poem. If you made a tune for it and sung it with some guitar in hand, I'm sure the one you are singing to will get all meltin' Razz Anyway, good rhyming and rhythm you got going. Simple, effective words. Always a pleasure to read. Keep writing... ^_^

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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Wed Oct 27, 2010 9:41 pm

I've stood all alone
In the fires of war.
On that field of stone
Where it's burned to the core.


Where nothing has power,
Where nothing seems real.
Where everyones a thief
Because its life that we steal.

It's others fates that we seal
While putting ours in their hands.
All of us holding keys of steel
All to be lost in the passing of sands.

Where skill counts for naught
It depends what you feel
For it's luck we've all fought
And chance seals the deal.

Standing amongst an army we're still a heart if stone,
You may always stand together and you'll always die alone.


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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Sat Oct 30, 2010 4:00 pm

Really good poem Alex, as usual. Well finally you updated and now you have something else to do than listening to your music try to get on BZ and clean after the puppies! Ahh well update soon
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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Sat Jan 01, 2011 1:25 am

Man, loking at the way I write poetry now and the way I used to go about it...I'm nowhere near as good as I used to be...
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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Thu Feb 10, 2011 1:32 am

Break Free

The sun sets and another day goes by
again I've asked for a reason why
stranded alone and left to die

Again the caged bird tries to break free
don't look back, its to late for me
too far gone for anyone to see

Trapped in the dark like an old machine
no longer living, just the shell of a dream
burdened by madness that bursts at the seams

Again the caged bird tries to break free
don't look back, its to late for me
too far gone for anyone to see

Now its to dark to see right from wrong
whispered, deceit is thrown into the throng
devoid of a hope all fades before long

Again in dreams the bird can be free
to spread his wings for all to see
to take flight and never once ever wonder why
at first light do those dreams have to be gone
and another day passed by like the lines of a song
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PostSubject: Re: Gardie's Poetry   Thu Feb 10, 2011 10:31 am

That's a rather sad poem, Lexie. But very strong, I think. Very...powerful.

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