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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Thu Jul 08, 2010 10:27 pm

Yes..I know...just thinking of the future...when all of this ends. >.< But I hope all our friendships last forever.
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Thu Jul 08, 2010 10:29 pm

CC ours will last longer than forever. I assure you it will.
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Fri Jul 09, 2010 5:21 pm

Assuming we grow up and still have time for BZ...Just kidding...Of course we'll have time!

CC.....................Great Poem! I actually loved that one...It seemed true, very true..Except for the friendship don't last for ever part :D
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Fri Jul 09, 2010 7:06 pm

No offense Matt...but...you sometimes dont have the time. *remembers him leaving IF* >.<

Ehhh well thanks for the feedback Matty. tongue
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Fri Jul 09, 2010 7:08 pm

Meh...That wasn't MY fault...It was...My grades'! Besides, my parents forced me to get off the computer -__-
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Fri Jul 09, 2010 7:59 pm

Lol. Oh yeah who makes the grades? Razz You never told me about your parents...okokok.
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sat Jul 10, 2010 1:21 pm

Fallen Angel wrote:
Umm...yesh..poem update...*cough*.... I dunno what to call it.


Cherish every moment we have together
because when we turn our backs it will be gone forever
our beautiful friendship we have for one another
and our love for each other.

Some say 'No nothing will ever change'
but everything changes
thats just the way life is.

We might have our memories forever with us
something no one can ever take away
but sooner or later we will have to go our separet ways
and live our life just like the rest.

But I know even though we are not together
I hope our frienship will stay forever and ever.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So yeah..C&C will be greatly appreciated.
Oh dear... >.< I liked the poem, tbh. But one thing I noticed was the fact that you seem to not believe in the concept that friendships do not last long. Umm, I kinda disagree with that one... , just saying.. >.< But, overall, that was a really good poem. Message was clear and so was the rythmn. :D
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sat Jul 10, 2010 4:48 pm

Yeeaaaahhh....'bout that. >.< Oh well....glad you liked it GG thanks for your feedback.
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sat Aug 07, 2010 11:14 pm

So..i was caught up in the moemtn...so i wa like lets post this crapp thig

So many scars

You go from one the next...
from the first to the second...and you feel the same emotion...
your ready for it to strike again....just like all the others..
just like the ones before him ...but this ones different.
sweet and caring...full of emotion...look again though..
look what he really is... hes the demon...
he'll rip u apart right from the core...right from the heart...
that leaves you withering in pain so unbearable...
like he just threw a thousand daggars to the heart..
what did i ever do to u to deserve this? or do you go hurting eveyone in sight? i thought you were someone i could count on...
someone whod be there in my time of need...
when other people hurt me id run to you for help...
i just didnt know id be running from you..thought u were different..but i was wrong.. your just like them...so cruel and evil.... your just like them...you left me so many scars.



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OMG you know what i realized? they all revolve around my scars:D

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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sat Aug 07, 2010 11:46 pm

Pretty good, it has good rhythm for a free verse poem. Look forward to more...
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sun Aug 08, 2010 2:49 am

D: what's this? This one was just so utterly sad. I felt it, CC. It really did. Meh, I wonder who that person you were talking about. That was just soo mean. >.>
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sun Aug 08, 2010 8:26 am

I agree, that was sad Sad

Well, I really thought it had good rhythm you could really feel it :D


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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sun Aug 08, 2010 3:20 pm

@Giorgia It was about me, in fact. Even though it wasn't poetry at all, at least she DOES post things unlike most others.
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sun Aug 08, 2010 6:42 pm

Sorry 'bout that..you have reasons..and I have reasons :/ I can take it down if you want me too...
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Thu Aug 12, 2010 11:34 am

Fallen Angel wrote:
Umm...yesh..poem update...*cough*.... I dunno what to call it.


Cherish every moment we have together
because when we turn our backs it will be gone forever
our beautiful friendship we have for one another
and our love for each other.

Some say 'No nothing will ever change'
but everything changes
thats just the way life is.

We might have our memories forever with us
something no one can ever take away
but sooner or later we will have to go our separet ways
and live our life just like the rest.

But I know even though we are not together
I hope our frienship will stay forever and ever.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So yeah..C&C will be greatly appreciated.
:O I didn't read this! Ohnoes! Better late than never :S
Wonderfully written this one. Very well, and orderly composed. The theme was brilliant, and it was all just too good. One of your best works, for me.

Fallen Angel wrote:
So..i was caught up in the moemtn...so i wa like lets post this crapp thig

So many scars

You go from one the next...
from the first to the second...and you feel the same emotion...
your ready for it to strike again....just like all the others..
just like the ones before him ...but this ones different.
sweet and caring...full of emotion...look again though..
look what he really is... hes the demon...
he'll rip u apart right from the core...right from the heart...
that leaves you withering in pain so unbearable...
like he just threw a thousand daggars to the heart..
what did i ever do to u to deserve this? or do you go hurting eveyone in sight? i thought you were someone i could count on...
someone whod be there in my time of need...
when other people hurt me id run to you for help...
i just didnt know id be running from you..thought u were different..but i was wrong.. your just like them...so cruel and evil.... your just like them...you left me so many scars.
Ah yes, and on the spot piece of free verse. Full of strong feeling, but I like that. And again great to read. You finally wrote one after a whole month. I'm hoping you churn out next ones sooner...

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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Mon Sep 06, 2010 3:49 pm

CC do we get anymore of your brilliant poems any time soon?
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Mon Sep 06, 2010 7:59 pm

What Keith said. Update CC!
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Fri Oct 22, 2010 8:50 pm

*laughs* Hahahahahahahah me write a poem? Unless you make super depressed that aint gonna happen :/ So Ar how may months has it been now? :S Well I'll try but they'll be empty >.>
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sat Oct 23, 2010 5:05 am

More than three months. Pretty long time. But I haven't got much time to read poems these days, which is a bit unfortunate. Still have to read Hasan's poem properly enough to make a comment, and all that Colm has written on FL, and all that the members on IF would have written since the last time I checked... which was a very long time ago... :S

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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Wed Dec 01, 2010 7:06 pm

So...I've finally gotten around to writing...a...thing. So yeah C&C please?


I cant stay away, it always drags me back. even though I shouldnt let it,
your like a drug to me.
When Im not with you it feels like emptieness is upon me,
it brings me closer and closer and when I give in it enpowers me,
it shuts off all my senses. I cant see without you,
breathing becomes impossible, my mind darts everywhere,
trying to look for an escape, any sign of escape,
but that to the feelings when I am with you is better.
When Im with you it seems alright.
I breathe regularly, my mind doesnt wander it stays in its place,
you fill me, complete me....but then you hurt me.
I give in, giving you all my feelings, something I give no one,
and you bend then, break them and snap them.
Whenever I leave you I go out in tears,
and to think Ive already learned what happens when I'm with you,
but that's how it is, everyday of my life, never to end.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Its actually an "it" if you know what I'm talking about..but then..again...no its an "it" just to me wouldn't sound right if I put in "it" wherever i put "you" but anyways....



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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Thu Dec 02, 2010 7:17 pm

Very good CC, Well written although I think it sounded a little more like a paragraph than a poem to me. But overall I like it.
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Fri Dec 03, 2010 6:38 am

Lol yeah...it actually does. Oh wells...... *shrugs*
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Fri Feb 01, 2013 2:06 pm

So its been a long time since anyone posted in here. :o



Anyways in Spanish today I had to make a haiku. Thought I'd post it here just because. Oh..and its in Spanish, maybe it'll get the wheels in y'all's heads turning;P

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En el invierno

nieve cae del cielo

brilla en el sol



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Tis short, and pretty lame, I thinkest, but anyways does anyone understand it?



If you do lets keep it hush hush for now^_^



NO GOOGLE TRANSLATE!
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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sat Feb 02, 2013 8:22 am

Don't do Spanish, sorry. Will have to learn sometime.

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PostSubject: Re: ~My Poems...   Sat Feb 02, 2013 9:17 am

Well then I guess I'm going to have to let you guys use Google translate then hmm?
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