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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Mon Dec 20, 2010 11:15 am

I quite like this poem. Like GG, I can't really get the meaning behind it, but that's no different from most poems. Good job with the rhyming and rhythm- poems that don't have good rhythm or rhyme that well annoy me, so, again, good job.

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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Mon Dec 20, 2010 11:33 am

Thanks FA, if you figure out the meaning let me knwo will ya?
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Mon Dec 20, 2010 11:35 am

If I manage it I will let you know- I'm not exactly good at analysing poems though.

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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Mon Dec 20, 2010 6:46 pm

This poem is a genuine enigma, it inspires several emotions and feelings. Very nice piece.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Tue Dec 21, 2010 4:03 am

Thanks alex, never thought I woudl hear some words like that do deseribce somethign I created.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Tue Dec 21, 2010 8:58 pm

It really is wierd though, every time I read it its like theres something there that I can't quite grasp...
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Tue Dec 21, 2010 9:19 pm

There is definitly something there, just wish I myself knew what it was lol. How can someone write something, and now know the meaning to it?
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Wed Dec 22, 2010 4:05 pm

I do it all the time....

god that is wierd.....
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Fri Feb 11, 2011 9:38 pm

wow that was a really good poem i really need to start reading them more u always come up with awesome stuff keith.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Mon Feb 14, 2011 10:39 am

Everyone above said it for me. I have no idea currently what it's about, but there is 100% something there.

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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Fri Mar 11, 2011 11:15 pm

The dark is coming,
The light is fading,
The skies are churning,
The grounds are quaking.

That which was bright,
Is soon to be gone.
That which was good,
Is soon to be amiss.

The dark is coming,
The light is fading,
The skies are churning,
The grounds are quaking.

The things I once loved,
Is now the things I miss.
The things I once wanted,
I the things I now regret.

The dark is coming,
The light is fading,
The skies are churning,
The grounds are quaking.

The hurt has come,
Not soon to be gone,
The pain I now know,
Not soon to be unknown.

The dark has come.
The light is gone.
The skies are scared.
The grounds are gone.


One of my shortest creations I think, but I also think that it about covers it all.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Fri Mar 11, 2011 11:18 pm

Sad *talks to self* its my fault that this poem came to be...... i think it is a good poem still *stops talking to self*
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Fri Mar 11, 2011 11:22 pm

No sam, it was my fault.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:02 am

*shakes head* Sad
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:02 am

Yes, I screwed up, its my fault, so the poem is my fault too.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:05 am

............. maybe i should let someone else deicde whose fault it is ...... ooooh nick where'd u go .....
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:06 am

Yea go get the person that will agree with you no matter what.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:09 am

i need nick or someone else to post in here GRRRR! hard to talk when the one person ur not speaking to is the only one posting.... -___-
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:29 am

Good poem, Keith. I think that's one of your best. Although, it's not a happy poem, it still is good. Well done. C:
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:30 am

i completely agree with GG it is very good even if i get the reason behind it ...
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:31 am

I dont know about one of the best GG, but thanks.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 10:29 am

I liked it, it definately sets a dark image.

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The things I once loved,
Is now the things I miss.
The things I once wanted,
I the things I now regret.

This was the only place I saw errors;

The things I once loved,
Are now the things I miss.
The things I once wanted,
Are the things I now regret.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 5:22 pm

That's quite a good poem, I liked it (although, I do have a preference for sadder/darker poems...) I like the repetition of the first stanza.

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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 10:41 pm

i hope u write more poems they r always good way better then any of the ones i ever thought of.
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PostSubject: Re: keiths poems   Sat Mar 12, 2011 11:50 pm

Nah sam, I quite like your poems. Mine are just an outline of basically all the pains I have ever gone through, maybe someday I will write a happy one.

I will post one again at some point, who knows when then they just come to me when they do.
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