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PostSubject: Poems by me...   Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:16 pm

Beat
Each one is loud and slow
beating one by one
each one passes love in flow
Till each single one is done

They go on forever
Waning over time
Glad we are together
Glad that you are mine

When they at last stop
know they beat for you
When the beating starts to hop
I still love all you do.

Knocked that up in a couple of minutes... enjoy.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:33 pm

OMG! That was a good poem. The ryhming flowed together and it's refreshing. At first I thought it was just for a 'beat' until I reached the end and it was actually a love poem! LOL on the theme! Great job Den!

And keep writing.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Thu Mar 11, 2010 2:59 pm

Great Poem, and as GG said, I thought it was Beat, till the end.

Anyway's keep writing!

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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri Mar 12, 2010 7:21 am

Nothing

Nothing moves in the night
Each sound is booming
The shadow clouds my sight
The haunting things looming

My vision goes, nothing more
I feel myself drop
I hear you, feel you open the door
I feel my breathing stop
my heartbeat also
Nothing more to do
I feel myself go
I can finally be with you.

Just a little something I threw together with nothing to do, enjoy.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri Mar 12, 2010 8:34 am

LOL. That was...I dunno, maybe its just me but I found this latest poem of yours funny. Hehehe.. Anyway, I liked the rhythm and how the words rhyme. Keep writing Den.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri Mar 12, 2010 9:06 am

I was suffering from Coffee withdrawl at the time of writing, yaaay coffee! So probably not my best work, I'll have to dig out my back catalogue sometime...
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Tue Mar 23, 2010 9:41 am

Good couple of poems you got there Dennaix. The way you've composed them was very nice. The first one had a topic that is very usual to write a poem about, but you managed to make it seem different. Rhythm and flow worked well.

The latter one was an interesting topic, but again you made it seem much simpler than it really is. The point was put forth easily. Thats not something everyone can do, so I commend you for it. The only problem for me was that the ninth line 'my heartbeat also' seem to break the rhythm a bit, but thats a small thing.

Overall good poems. Will definitely like to read more from you...

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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 19, 2010 8:24 am

Thee

Behold thine eyes for which to gaze into
Thy lips to kiss
Thy body to hold

Behold thine smile for which to entice often
Thy blush for which to love
Thy mind for which to test

Behold thine heart for which to keep beating
Thy breath for which to sing me to sleep
Thy arms for which to run to

Behold thee, my one and only
To thee I belong
Heart, body and soul

For thee I would swim the sea
Climb to the stars
And walk to the end and back again

To see thee smile I would hold thine hand
Sunset to sunrise you are mine
Through the night we are ours

These promises are mine to give

And thine to take.

For thou art taken all that is me
And I will give it to you
Shoud thee ask for thw world I would wrap it in a bow

For I could not imagine me with a blank space at my side
That space is thine to fill
At my side, in my home and in my heart.

I reserve them for thee.

Forever and always.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 19, 2010 8:29 am

Aww.. That is such a sweet poem Den. I love it. Meh, I always find poems with a style such as yours really good. Ahehe.. Keep wwriting dude. ^_^ I am waiting. Razz
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 19, 2010 8:34 am

Very beautiful. Quite differently styled than your previous ones. The praise was very effective. A poem from the heart as these kinds need to be, but supplemented with enough head to make it into a fantastic written piece of work. Your best among the three, without a doubt. Don't think anything was lacking. Good job...

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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Wed Apr 21, 2010 3:20 pm

The Never

Through it all
You were never here
I did all the work
You were full of fear
I kept us going
I kept us together
You were always absent
You went through the never
I believed in us
You believed in you
In this situation
What else can I do?

When I believe in you and I
I want us to be together
While you believe in only you
And you go through the never.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Wed Apr 21, 2010 3:28 pm

WHOA!! That was a bitter poem Den. I don't know but why did it remind me of your ex-girlfriend? Now I wonder, what inspired this one?
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Wed Apr 21, 2010 4:14 pm

Nice poem Dennaix, sounds like my kind of poem.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Thu Apr 22, 2010 11:02 am

Interesting that. Good topic and well written. The flow was good. Use of 'never' was intriguing. Keep up...

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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 26, 2010 5:18 am

Mistake

It's funny how we never wanted it
You wanted more
I wanted nothing
You and I were never meant to be
An accident
A mistake
You were a waste of my time
As I was of yours

If you smiled at me
it was in derision

If you laughed
It was at me

If you spoke
You lied

And that was our relationship

A Lie
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 26, 2010 9:46 am

OUCH!! Dude, are you broken-hearted? That poem was so sad. Meh, made you think of relationships that ends badly. No Anyway, I liked it and keep writing! ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 26, 2010 10:30 am

And now for some much needed cheeryness!

Would

I would walk around the world for you
And then take one more step
I would climb Everest for you
Then jump to show how high you make me
I would swim the Atlantic for you
Then do a length of the pool
I would do anything for you
Then I would do anything else

When you cry I will smile
When you smile I will reciprocate

Because you make me whole
With you I am something good
I was broken and beaten
But you fixed me with love

Thank you

I love you too
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 26, 2010 10:36 am

LOL.. Now that was fun.. Like it. Fun to read and somehow, it did remind me of young love.. LOL XD
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Mon Apr 26, 2010 2:16 pm

Omg...I really like it! and I agree with GG it was fun!
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Thu Apr 29, 2010 6:14 am

You

I hate walking
Each step away from you is disaster
Each mile away from you is a mile away from me
You make me whole
You make me me
You well become me
As I well become you

You make me smile
You make me laugh
You make me happy

Without you, I go back to the dark
The hated shadows from whence I came.

Thank you.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri Apr 30, 2010 12:02 am

That was a good poem too Den. I vey much liked the first stanza. The unity of two lovers can really be seen and the message was too clear so, well-done. Smile

P.S. Poem update. ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri Apr 30, 2010 6:33 am



I lie here
Distant and close
The darkness around us quiet and peaceful
I hear your breath...
Calm and happy
The sound like the sweetest music to me
I feel your heart
my hand on your chest
The feeling of peace and joy

As the night wears on
I do not sleep
I gain my rest watching you
Protecting you
Loving you
You keep me sane and alive
I keep you safe
I keep you in my heart

I cannot move mountains for you
I cannot swim oceans
I cannot walk to the ends of the earth
But I can do this...

This silent love
This beloved quiet

Though I am but a man
I am a man with nought but love for you

Your face
Your eyes
Your breath
Your body snug with mine

So I cannot offer riches
But the riches of love
I cannot offer a home
But I can offer you shelter from the cruel world

Just as you offer me love
This perfect moment in the night

Because it is in silence I hear you

It is in hearing you I am rested.
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri Apr 30, 2010 7:00 am

Aww... that was so so sweet Den!! Imagery was really good. I can actually say it was perfect. Loved the theme and everything! Keep it up. I am looking forward to a new one. ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri May 14, 2010 7:35 am

Wishing

Does wishing make it better?
Make the pain go away?
Does hoping make you feel good?
Last you through the day?

Because I wish for you
As you are
I wish for us
As I know we can be

I wish for love
As I give to you
I wish for shelter
Which we give to each other

I wish for happiness
Which you can give me
I wish for peace
Which you instill upon me

But most of all

Most of all

I wish for you to be loved
Sheltered
Happy
And at peace

With me or without me
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PostSubject: Re: Poems by me...   Fri May 14, 2010 8:40 am

silent I don't know how to react dude. I'm kinda speechless. silent cheers
LOL... Keep your poems coming dude. I honestly like it. The poem is so fun to read and etc. ;)
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